I am trying to think of something critical to say so you can feel justified in your whining (ha ha)
LMAO!
i guess the only thing I would have like to know as the reader is why didn't she ask why he was injured? and more of inkling of her feelings for him ....
Okay, yeah. I think particularly that second one, about her feelings, because I did want it to come across that she likes him, sort of despite herself. That she was hurt by his leaving and had taken that month or so to kind of force herself to get over it, and now when he's shown up again she's not quite sure what to think, and she'd just as soon not talk to him, not because she doesn't like him but because it makes her uncomfortable.
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Date: 2007-06-20 07:43 pm (UTC)LMAO!
i guess the only thing I would have like to know as the reader is why didn't she ask why he was injured? and more of inkling of her feelings for him ....
Okay, yeah. I think particularly that second one, about her feelings, because I did want it to come across that she likes him, sort of despite herself. That she was hurt by his leaving and had taken that month or so to kind of force herself to get over it, and now when he's shown up again she's not quite sure what to think, and she'd just as soon not talk to him, not because she doesn't like him but because it makes her uncomfortable.
Nice little run-on sentence there, yeah? ;-)
hope that helps~
It helped a lot, thank you. :-*